Improvement Proposals to Piece

Above is a list of proposed changes to the Piece. I will use this as a guideline for the most part and will refer to it when editing my piece. I will attempt to describe how I will be changing things in the piece to create a better cut in brief here, but I will also clarify once I have created an edit to one of these items in the Blog as usual.

Comments on Proposals:

I whole heartily agree with these statements in full and I would like to go through them to maybe clarify my mistakes and why I may have made them, essentially this would help me to understand how I managed to make these mistakes and avoid them in the future.

First off, I think the reason why I misplaced the studio logo was simply because I didn't clarify to my partner well enough that after I made it, that it would be placed second, Because I made it second, we accidentally placed it in based on the order we imported them in without having enough thought put in. In addition to this most of the credit choices we made were in fact misplaced, this was partly due to a misunderstanding concerning how long the credits would be, without thinking to clearly we attempted to put as many credits within the piece, not essentially which ones were the most important, leading to a lack of order. still concerning credits, I think that we made the credits longer to string out the end sequence but a better method for this could be to include more pictures or even relating to my research in the film 'Red Dragon', the inclusion of newspapers could also be effective.



The Continuity Issue:
Caused by accidental
movement of the cast

Secondly, In the music aspect, we had some trouble in editing the song to see where the best fade out would be, consequently, we thought that maybe a fade wouldn't work well in the scene, However, after some consideration after reading this list, I think that maybe if the song starts sooner, we could fade before my character enters the main crime scene if we overlayed it with the sound of crime scene ambiance, the addition of which would give us something to allow the audience a strong audio transition into the scene.

The Continuity factors of this piece seem inconsistent and I think we could benefit from a clean cover over our footage to make the footage tighter in a sense. I personally have issues with the shot reverse shot factor between the two detectives while walking because of both where they start and the general shakiness of the camera, It isn't a huge issue, but I really think that we are probably going to re-shoot that scene just for the sake of a cleaner look. As I have illustrated the main problem for the continuity we accidentally created, was that the characters start closer to the set item in the centre of the room, while not expressing any time where they have moved between the shots, disorienting the audience as a result.

The gap at the end of the piece was an unintentional mistake while rendering on my part and it was simply a minor error that can easily be fixed, however, the gap after the narration was intentional to create a sense of seriousness, as if the information was relevant and required processing, I think that can be edited into a better shape however and I will be doing so accordingly

The Props for the piece, were something that my partner was very proud of and I thank her strongly, she was in fact the main contributor for these items and indeed was the one who came up with the suggestions for what our characters were going to wear during the piece.

Finally, I very much agree with the last comment, the credits with the crime scene photos would in turn give the film a much more interesting start, essentially it has the opportunity to create some high quality impressions from the get go, instead of what is essentially a plain black text title, It would help the audience to grasp the aspect of the film as well as it would indicate from the start the theme. While the original piece proposal didn't include a film title, I have some strong ideas for a title now, involving typewriter fonts, in addition to newspaper style credits to give the film a slightly rougher style.

In total, the film isn't a lost cause in any sense from what I have seen, I think that given our time frame we have plenty of opportunities to clean the piece up a bit and maybe develop a few more shots to give it more variety, while my partner is absent today, I'm sure she shares many of my concerns and also has her own ideas for improvements which I will gladly develop with her as she develops mine.